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Through the good and the bad
you were always happy, never sad

Through each day you'd smile and laugh
brightening the life of all in your path

But when you died and the world grew cold
I heard you whisper from Death's dark hold

"Just keep smiling, if only for me"
"If nothing else, cause then you'll see"

"The world around you is always in need"
"but give it a smile and it will be freed"

"Freed from the chains that bind it down"
"Freed from the hate that makes us all frown"

"Freed from the sorrow that darkens your day"
"so that our friendship can wash it away"

"Even now, when you feel down"
"and the world makes you frown"

"I'll be here, right with you"
"to make your smile shine like new"

That's what I heard and it rang in my head
as i raced to your house to find you dead

As I sat with you, crying in pain
Some of my tears, they fell on your mane

And as they touched, what did I see
I saw you get up and smile at me

You told me to smile, if only for you
And the reason why I already knew

The world around me was still in need
But I gave it a smile and it was freed

Freed from the chains that bound it down
and all the things that made us frown

Freed from the sorrow that darkened my day
So that our friendship can wash it away

Even now, as you continue to fade
I still know, in my heart you stayed

I may not hear you, touch you or see
But still I know, your right next to me

And from today, till the day I die
You'll always be here, my Pinkie Pie...
I came up with this piece when i saw;
"Never Stop Smiling" [link]

The piece inspired me to write this poem as a dialog for Rainbow Dash

I cried a little while writing this, but my tears couldn't dull the sharp words of this poem, sinking deep into my heart...
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mowmow7 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Student General Artist
i was trying to cry while reading this i almost did but i was watching pewdiepiew XD amazing work tho!!!!!!!!
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mowmow7 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Student General Artist
oh... that rymed diddnt it? oops XD
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centaury2 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
a lie i will not tell,
tears this poem did fell.

silent i was in the end
delayed reaction before it set in
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to liked it so much and it managed to impact you emotionally.
Though, I'm sorry it made you sad...
Although it was the intention, I still feel kind of bad.
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centaury2 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
haha- if anything i would personally put you in a league similar to silly filly studios. but that is just my opinion. their works have also made such an impact. 
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, that means a lot to me
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centaury2 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
^.^
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PrincessLuna2424 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Student Artist
It's so sad!! I love it! (sorry if that sounded weird, usually things that make me sad are my favorite things).
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's not weird.
I know quite a few others who are the same way.
I'm glad you like it so much!
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PrincessLuna2424 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014  Student Artist
:) (Smile) 
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Hollena Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I just cried ;_; oh my gosh
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*Wipes away tears and hugs Hollena*
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XKitchenPrincessX Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist

lets see if I can read this without crying.............fail :c

 

I think this is really amazing I really love all your poems! ^^

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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
That means alot to me
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PurpleRoselyn Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Mind if I read this poem as rainbow dash in a youtube video? I'll credit you! :)
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sure, I don't mind.
Just make sure you get permission to post the image as well
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pinkamenadianepielol Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
;') u did a great job! *BROHOOF*
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
/)(\
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pinkamenadianepielol Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooo pinkie is my fav nooooooooooooooo she is dead noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo(1 week)oooooooooooooooooooooooo
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconderpyspazplz::iconsays3plz:SAY WHAAAAAAT?

:iconangryderpyplz::iconsays3plz:Don't you DARE say something like that about Pinkie!!!!! Especially with RD right next to you!!!!!!!

**you look to your right**

:iconstyle1plz::iconstyle2plz::iconstyle3plz::iconstyle4plz::iconsays3plz:I don't want to miss anything about her.......
:iconnoneplz::iconhaloplz:
:iconangelwingleftplz::iconpinkiepieplz::iconangelwingrightplz::iconsays3plz:And you won't have to Dashy, cause I'll always be here, right with you, to make your smile shine like new!

:iconpartycannonplz::iconsays3plz: Now lets throw a "Giggle at my ghosty" party
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Hotchoctea100 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
Heartwarming
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You think so?
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Hotchoctea100 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
i'm just tired at the moment what i was meant to say is it's sad (wasn't paying attention to what i wrote lol)
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's fine.
Everyone has one or two of those sleepy messages floating around somewhere.
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Hotchoctea100 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
I dunno how to say it let's just say it's sad
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Hotchoctea100 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
Well heartwarming and a bit sad at the same time.
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greendayfan123456789 Featured By Owner May 25, 2013
awww! the feels! this is beautiful! :iconfoxawwplz:
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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greendayfan123456789 Featured By Owner May 25, 2013
no problem! :):iconglompplz:
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XKitchenPrincessX Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
omg im crying right now DX
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Even though I didn't mean to, this kind of ended up being a sequel to "Goodbye..." [link]
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XKitchenPrincessX Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow well there both really good :D
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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loly4678 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
im crying
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Let it out, and cry tears of remembrance for our favorite party pony
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loly4678 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
yeah
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alwysbkre8ive Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Hobbyist
how the heck do you make these so sad D:
T-T
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Cougar200 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
OH GOD THE FEELS :icondesperateplz:
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yea....
That was me when I was writing this.....
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Cougar200 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
XD lol
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Indieanju Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Seriously, you don't know how much this helps. A friend of mine died a few months ago. She was only twelve. My other friends have been under so much stress, they've been taking stressease pills. This cheered them right up, and they cried tears of joy for hours. You're amazingly helpful to help my friends like that.

Thank you so much. Just how we feel now.:hug:

By the way, I totally agree with *WordOfChen try to make the poetry flow smoother, so that every line matches up. I'm not saying it's bad; I'm just saying that maybe with a few extra words or with a few words less here and there, the poetry would flow smoother, and it be very pleasant to read.

Please don't think i'm being snotty because i'm thirteen. This is the same advice my English teacher gives to me when she's correcting my poems.

Anywho, thankies so much. I really appreciate this.
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm only 19 so I understand the problem of being thought inferior due to my young age.

I love any input you can give me so that I can better my art form.

I'm glad that the love, peace, and happiness that flowed from my heart, into this piece, has found it's way to the ones that needed it.
You have absolutely no idea how much this means to me as a poet, and a person...
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Professional Writer
As requested here is my review:

Okay from the first line, quick problem jumps out at me. Your structure.

You must learn to find the rhythm in words. Let me demonstrate:

This is the original:

"Through the good and the bad
you were always happy, never sad"

This is how I would write it:

Through both the good times and bad,
You were always happy and it made me glad.
So many times I worried that I'd see you sad,
I worried so much, it drove me mad.


The key I'm trying to demonstrate is that the words must sound good when they are spoken. When you read them out it must carry a flow. The way you did it in the original was a good idea, but the presentation was lacking since the first line was shorter than the second (there was too much lag on the second especially with the comma). I know it might sound weird, but if you keep reading them out loud you'll more or less get a feel for the words.

Remember the first stanza must be flawless, even if others contain minor errors the first must be perfect, for the first decides whether your work will be read as a whole or skipped.

Next, the punctuation needs work, because if you have blank punctuation (no punctuation) then everything is taken as a comma. You'll notice with my works that I make use of full stops and other types of punctuation to change the pace as is necessary. Learn to use those and you'll be much stronger.

I hope this helps you ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Alright,
I'll try to incorporate what you suggested into my future works.

Thanks for the review!!!
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Welcome ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Coltboy Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist
Wonderful! Simply wonderful!
You, friend, have renewed my love for poetry.
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to hear it!
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DanteIncognito Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Student General Artist
I've seen this poem in the comment section of ~sharktino's work.

I could feel the very emotion that went with it when I read those words of your.
Every part was well written and I know that you put your heart into it.

And trust me, I know the feeling of people who don't show their interesest for the art of others,
wether it's poetry or paintings. I've been through that for years on my other account.
Lots of them do interest, but they don't have the spirit to actually say something about it.

I suggest you to submit it to more MLP and poetry groups, to get more attention with it and I can
put a link in my journal to this poem, if you want to =)

I can see the very fire in you, but you need to let it all out. And sometimes you have to find more ways
to do that and to show others this fire of yours.


But you're doing great, keep this poetry fire of yours.
It looks amazing! Great job you did on this!
Keep it up, my friend =) :+fav:
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
For now I'm just going to stick with MLPforums and DeviantArt till my life gets a bit less busy...

But,
if you want to post it somewhere, go for it.
Just let me know where and add a link to the original.
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank You
Feel free to post it

I also have my work on MLPforums
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