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Goodbye. by Unnop64

To you Cruel world, friends and all,
I say goodbye, as now I fall.

You've shown me pain, sadness and fear.
It cut me deep, bled out my cheer.

But still I laughed, as though to hide,
The gaping hole, my heart reside.

I wore a mask of borrowed cheer
to hide behind, to cover my fear

For I thought, I hoped, a prayer
that once I'll be, a happy mare.

But so it is not and never shall be.
The impossible wish, crushed within me

Ground to dust, from hooves to head.
It pours on out through tears I shed.

I can't go on, this pain I hide,
I've given up, can't keep inside.

So now I fall, and now I die
For though I laugh, Inside I cry...
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Thank you all so much!!!!!!!!


The above Image was created by :iconunnop64:~Unnop64, and can be found here; [link]

The poem was by :icontemporaltwins:~TemporalTwins (me)


Right, so...
This poem sprung at me from this sad picture of Pinkamena taking her own life, and escaping from the happy lie she had build around herself.
It's kind of dark in my opinion, but it really depends on your perspective.
I actually came up with the ending for this poem first, and then the rest of it came after.
There is a silver lining to the picture though.
If you look carefully, straight above Pinkie's ear, you see Rainbow Dash flying to her rescue.
I thought that this sort of adds the message that, no matter how bad it gets, no matter how bad life screws you over, you never have to go it alone.
You can always rely on your friends and family to be there and lend you their strength when you are weighed down by sorrow.
And if you feel like the only way out is to take your life, don't do it.
You can always find another way.
Know that no matter if you feel like no one cares, that you are worthless, that you have no reason to live...that it isn't true, and what's are not alone..........
Find someone to talk to, get another perspective on the situation, but don't ever bottle it up.
If you do, no matter how hard you try, no matter how good you feel, all that pent up depression and anger WILL boil over, and when it does, there is no telling what will happen...
You might just go through with IT. We might just lose the talented soul of a Deviant. A soul that will be missed, and would leave a void in our hearts, never to be filled again...

Don't hold back the tears you cry.
Don't fake your life, and live a lie.
It's better to cry a river of tears,
than drown your soul throughout the years.
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mowmow7 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  New member Student General Artist
omg so sad and touching amazing!
scootfan213 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student Artist
This is how i  feel about myself. 
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Please don't
I know how hard it can be to see the little bits of light that make it to the depths of your despair.
But know that if you just reach out, you'll find hundreds of others around you, going through the same pain, even if for a different reason.
And then you'll reach up, finding a thousand arms extended to pull you out from the pain and into the light of day.
centaury2 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
wish i had read this yesterday, sounds eerily similar to the one-shot i wrote based on smile if only for me. mines worse though.
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That new one I posted yesterday came out of me attempting to reply to that with a poem...
centaury2 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
haha...i think i'll upload it. just for sh**s and giggles. o3o
theroyalpain79 Featured By Owner May 1, 2014
Wow, that is really sad. We all knew that she was depressed, but not suicidal. Equicidal maybe, but not suicidal. 
zorualover12 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student General Artist
I feel like crying now  onion sad 
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner May 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
We listen close, sobbing we cry,
hearing her words, that final goodbye...
PartyWithTheDemons Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This nearly made me cry ;-;
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