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Goodbye. by Unnop64

To you Cruel world, friends and all,
I say goodbye, as now I fall.

You've shown me pain, sadness and fear.
It cut me deep, bled out my cheer.

But still I laughed, as though to hide,
The gaping hole, my heart reside.

I wore a mask of borrowed cheer
to hide behind, to cover my fear

For I thought, I hoped, a prayer
that one day I'd be, a happy mare.

But so it is not and never shall be.
The impossible wish, crushed within me

Ground to dust, from hooves to head.
It pours on out through tears I shed.

I can't go on, this pain I hide,
I've given up, can't keep inside.

So now I fall, and now I die
For though I laugh, Inside I cry...
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Thank you all so much!!!!!!!!


The above Image was created by :iconunnop64:~Unnop64, and can be found here; [link]

The poem was by :icontemporaltwins:~TemporalTwins (me)


Right, so...
This poem sprung at me from this sad picture of Pinkamena taking her own life, and escaping from the happy lie she had build around herself.
It's kind of dark in my opinion, but it really depends on your perspective.
I actually came up with the ending for this poem first, and then the rest of it came after.
There is a silver lining to the picture though.
If you look carefully, straight above Pinkie's ear, you see Rainbow Dash flying to her rescue.
I thought that this sort of adds the message that, no matter how bad it gets, no matter how bad life screws you over, you never have to go it alone.
You can always rely on your friends and family to be there and lend you their strength when you are weighed down by sorrow.
And if you feel like the only way out is to take your life, don't do it.
You can always find another way.
Know that no matter if you feel like no one cares, that you are worthless, that you have no reason to live...that it isn't true, and what's are not alone..........
Find someone to talk to, get another perspective on the situation, but don't ever bottle it up.
If you do, no matter how hard you try, no matter how good you feel, all that pent up depression and anger WILL boil over, and when it does, there is no telling what will happen...
You might just go through with IT. We might just lose the talented soul of a Deviant. A soul that will be missed, and would leave a void in our hearts, never to be filled again...

Don't hold back the tears you cry.
Don't fake your life, and live a lie.
It's better to cry a river of tears,
than drown your soul throughout the years.
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TemporalTwins Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I Agree
rainbowdash435 Oct 19, 2013
I didnt make it why did pinkie do such a thing we never noticed anything until that day
Dashies to far away to save her why would pinkie do something like that
Dont stop at the poem right a story wait can i do that
TemporalTwins Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Go for it!
The image is not mine though,
you would have to ask ~Unnop64 for permission if you want to use it.
As for my poem, I don't mind you using it as a base as long as it is accredited to me and you link back to here somewhere.
TemporalTwins Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not a problem!
TomradeM Jul 21, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
great job, this is very emmotionally gripping, I love art that makes me feel emmotional
TemporalTwins Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
I'm glad I got your feel to flow!
rainbowdash435 Oct 19, 2013
You got a kid who wants whos askin permission to right a story name galenrules it'd be nice to acknowledge him
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