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Goodbye. by Unnop64

To you Cruel world, friends and all,
I say goodbye, as now I fall.

You've shown me pain, sadness and fear.
It cut me deep, bled out my cheer.

But still I laughed, as though to hide,
The gaping hole, my heart reside.

I wore a mask of borrowed cheer
to hide behind, to cover my fear

For I thought, I hoped, a prayer
that once I'll be, a happy mare.

But so it is not and never shall be.
The impossible wish, crushed within me

Ground to dust, from hooves to head.
It pours on out through tears I shed.

I can't go on, this pain I hide,
I've given up, can't keep inside.

So now I fall, and now I die
For though I laugh, Inside I cry...
Whoa, front page???
THIS IS INCREDIBLE!!!!!
Thank you all so much!!!!!!!!

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The above Image was created by :iconunnop64:~Unnop64, and can be found here; [link]

The poem was by :icontemporaltwins:~TemporalTwins (me)

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Right, so...
This poem sprung at me from this sad picture of Pinkamena taking her own life, and escaping from the happy lie she had build around herself.
It's kind of dark in my opinion, but it really depends on your perspective.
I actually came up with the ending for this poem first, and then the rest of it came after.
There is a silver lining to the picture though.
If you look carefully, straight above Pinkie's ear, you see Rainbow Dash flying to her rescue.
I thought that this sort of adds the message that, no matter how bad it gets, no matter how bad life screws you over, you never have to go it alone.
You can always rely on your friends and family to be there and lend you their strength when you are weighed down by sorrow.
And if you feel like the only way out is to take your life, don't do it.
You can always find another way.
Know that no matter if you feel like no one cares, that you are worthless, that you have no reason to live...that it isn't true, and what's more.....you are not alone..........
Find someone to talk to, get another perspective on the situation, but don't ever bottle it up.
If you do, no matter how hard you try, no matter how good you feel, all that pent up depression and anger WILL boil over, and when it does, there is no telling what will happen...
You might just go through with IT. We might just lose the talented soul of a Deviant. A soul that will be missed, and would leave a void in our hearts, never to be filled again...

Don't hold back the tears you cry.
Don't fake your life, and live a lie.
It's better to cry a river of tears,
than drown your soul throughout the years.
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:icondreamcraftsman:
DreamCraftsman Featured By Owner Edited Oct 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
So sad! :(
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Edited Oct 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
When jokers sigh
and laughers cry
a world was shattered within

She's on the ledge
tips over the edge
her fall can finally begin

Crying, sighing
as she's flying
to grip of death, so cold

Her smiling face
a laughing grace
within our hearts, we'll hold
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mowmow7 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Student General Artist
omg so sad and touching amazing!
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:iconscootfan213:
scootfan213 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student Artist
This is how i  feel about myself. 
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Please don't
I know how hard it can be to see the little bits of light that make it to the depths of your despair.
But know that if you just reach out, you'll find hundreds of others around you, going through the same pain, even if for a different reason.
And then you'll reach up, finding a thousand arms extended to pull you out from the pain and into the light of day.
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centaury2 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
wish i had read this yesterday, sounds eerily similar to the one-shot i wrote based on smile if only for me. mines worse though.
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
lol
That new one I posted yesterday came out of me attempting to reply to that with a poem...
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:iconcentaury2:
centaury2 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
haha...i think i'll upload it. just for sh**s and giggles. o3o
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:icontheroyalpain79:
theroyalpain79 Featured By Owner May 1, 2014
Wow, that is really sad. We all knew that she was depressed, but not suicidal. Equicidal maybe, but not suicidal. 
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:iconzorualover12:
zorualover12 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2014  Student General Artist
I feel like crying now  onion sad 
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner May 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
We listen close, sobbing we cry,
hearing her words, that final goodbye...
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:iconwaraiigoe:
waraiigoe Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This nearly made me cry ;-;
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:icongeoice:
geoice Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014
spike- pinkie no
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:icondbzfan12:
DBZFan12 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I Agree
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:iconrainbowdash435:
rainbowdash435 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
I didnt make it why did pinkie do such a thing we never noticed anything until that day
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:icongalenrules:
galenrules Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013
Dashies to far away to save her why would pinkie do something like that
Dont stop at the poem right a story wait can i do that
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Go for it!
The image is not mine though,
you would have to ask ~Unnop64 for permission if you want to use it.
As for my poem, I don't mind you using it as a base as long as it is accredited to me and you link back to here somewhere.
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:icongalenrules:
galenrules Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Thank you
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not a problem!
:iconderpyclapplz:
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:icontomradem:
TomradeM Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
great job, this is very emmotionally gripping, I love art that makes me feel emmotional
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
I'm glad I got your feel to flow!
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:iconrainbowdash435:
rainbowdash435 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
You got a kid who wants whos askin permission to right a story name galenrules it'd be nice to acknowledge him
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you,
Didn't see it
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:iconrainbowdash435:
rainbowdash435 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Anytime
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:icontheentiresovietunion:
TheEntireSovietUnion Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
Reminds me of that campers poem in the walking dead. "Thats it. World gone to shit. Might as well quit."
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol
I like that one, though I've never actually seen that movie
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:icontheentiresovietunion:
Its not a movie its a tv show. Surprised how you havent heard of it. The poem made me chuckle. This poem you wrote is beautiful.
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm, I might have a look at it some time....
I never expected that someone's reaction to this poem would be to laugh....
Oh well, whatever floats your boat!
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:icontheentiresovietunion:
Im not talking about your poem Xd
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lol
OH
That makes a bit more sense
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:iconpinkamenadianepielol:
pinkamenadianepielol Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013
The FEELS man!...The FEELS...!
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Writing it made my feels feel.....
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:iconhotchoctea100:
Hotchoctea100 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
This literally made me get a tear in my eye.
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Good to know you're finally dusting off your feels
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:iconhotchoctea100:
Hotchoctea100 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
Yeah a person helped me out with my problem now I'm warm, emotional and love showing and getting affection.
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's good to hear
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:iconlegion374:
legion374 Featured By Owner May 13, 2013
Its really good...sad but good
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks
I like to think I'm improving,
though I'd like to get away from these darker corridors upon which i trot...
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:iconlegion374:
legion374 Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
well I hope you do good in the future and keep up with the good work
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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:iconlegion374:
legion374 Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
your welcome
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:iconzechert:
Zechert Featured By Owner May 2, 2013
beautiful!
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well.....
I'll admit, this is the first time someone commented that this piece is "Beautiful"
Glad you liked it
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Silverstreak23 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist
(((I cried at this because, really, my life online, in real life, and my life in my imagination is like this...)))
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:icontemporaltwins:
TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry to hear that...
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:iconsilverstreak23:
Silverstreak23 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist
((( DX So am I. I think I may actually be depressed, but my sisters, boyfriend, parents, mutt, and My Little Pony are keeping my life from being empty. )))
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TemporalTwins Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's good to hear
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:iconsilverstreak23:
Silverstreak23 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist
(((yup.)))
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RainbowLightningFire Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Student Writer
This explains me much more than I thought it would. Just it...does. Maybe soon I can free away from my shell and be who I am, shy and scared of life around me. In school and at home I'm the troublemaker and the funny person. Truth is that that's not me. Thanks for this amazing poem!

:iconrainbowdashsaluteplz:
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